What I fixed

I handed in my paper today. I made multiple changes to my paper. The changes that I made were a whole new introduction paragraph, refining verbs, correcting to MLA format, adding information about the film, as well as making my conclusion stronger. The peer evaluations seemed to help me a lot because we had more than thirty minutes to critique people on what they should fix and amend. I did enjoy this because it showed how much other students can help as well as Dr. Kyburz's notes. All in all, I believe my final draft was much improved from previous drafts. I did learn a lot from this assignment and will improve on future assignments.

What to fix

I know for my summary entry I need to fix a few things. First thing I need to change is to extend my  actual paper. Make everything more in detail and extend the summarization of my paragraphs. Explain what is happening in each scene in more detail. Another thing that I need to work on is trying to not give my own opinion. I find this quiet difficult sometimes because I am always trying to say what I think about everything I write.  Making sure my tense is correct. I need to make sure that I am always in the present tense instead of switching back and forth from present to past or vice versa. The last ting that I should focus on is making sure my verbs are precise to what scene I am trying to portray. This is extremely important to the reader because verbs pretty much describe what the message is you're trying to get across. Transition between paragraphs would be big as well. Make sure my paragraphs are easily flowing from one to the next. Other than that just making sure that my summary makes sense when reading it allowed!

NeruoFuse

About two weeks ago I started watching a new series on Netflix called Limitless. The show is based off the movie with Bradley Cooper in it. To summarize a man by the name of Brian Finch is struggling in his life and he comes upon this drug called NZT. What the drug does is instead of only allowing our minds to use only 10% of our brains it enables us to use 100%. So, Brian, becomes incredibly knowledgeable about anything he seems to remember from his past and whatever he reads he remembers. As i was scrolling through some news articles I found something called Neurofuse. Neruofuse is a type of medicine that is similar to NZT but it does not give you the ability to remember everything. The drug just helps you stay more aware of your surroundings, focus on tasks, and be attentive to detail. I thought it was very interesting to see because I just watched a whole film about a drug similar to this. I did some research and the bottle costs about 60 dollars per thirty capsules. Some people said that it helped them a lot and others not so much. I think in the future I would be interested in trying this just to see if it would help me as well.

Mountain biking experience

I had many greta things happen to me this week. One being my mountain bike ride that I took on Tuesday afternoon. It was a gorgeous day so I decided to go for a ride. I went our to discover some new trials that I researched a few weeks back and I finally found the time to go. I started out my ride and the trials were really fun straight from the start. The two best things that I look forward to about mountain biking is 1- going through the tails so fast that I know I could get hurt pretty bad if I make a wrong decision. 2 if getting lost in the woods and trying to figure my way back. The first thirty seconds of my ride both of those things happened and I knew it was gonna be a great ride. Throughout my ride I only went down once and it was because I took a turn too quickly but the a positive thing is that I didn't come out with any serious injuries. I love mountain biking and can' wait for the weekend to come to go for another ride.

Social media's impact

Why is social media such a crucial role in everything we do today? Everything in this world virtually revolves around social media. Politics is a great example. If a candidate see's that a large group of people are pushing for something, the candidate tends to explore his possibilities he/ she has to pass a bill in order to please the people. Social media sways people's opinion severely. This is both parties in this presidential debate have been utilizing it and monitoring it so closely unlike any other race before. Airliners, fast food, supermarkets, any company that you can think of utilize social media for feed back for their current product and input from consumers for future products. Social media has its ups and downs just like everything but I think it has helped the whole world feel just a bit closer together.

Figuring out how to blog

Blogging is a very simple but very complex idea. Blogging enables people express themselves and share their ideas with the rest of the world. Setting up the blog was very difficult for me because I was still logged into my lewis account and was having trouble with creating a new blog. Coming up with a design will be interesting trying to navigate through the blogging website but it's all a learning experience. I am excited to start blogging and trying to get my ideas out to the class and the world.