What to fix

I know for my summary entry I need to fix a few things. First thing I need to change is to extend my  actual paper. Make everything more in detail and extend the summarization of my paragraphs. Explain what is happening in each scene in more detail. Another thing that I need to work on is trying to not give my own opinion. I find this quiet difficult sometimes because I am always trying to say what I think about everything I write.  Making sure my tense is correct. I need to make sure that I am always in the present tense instead of switching back and forth from present to past or vice versa. The last ting that I should focus on is making sure my verbs are precise to what scene I am trying to portray. This is extremely important to the reader because verbs pretty much describe what the message is you're trying to get across. Transition between paragraphs would be big as well. Make sure my paragraphs are easily flowing from one to the next. Other than that just making sure that my summary makes sense when reading it allowed!